It's a good use of environmental context to show the passage of time, but I think you need to look at more reference for the camels sitting postures (I am correct in saying that they are camels?). To help with that, try sketching more images of camels, kind of like how you practice figure drawing, except looking at photos instead of actual camels. (Or if you can get a camel, do.) And when you do a pencil sketch for the finalized illustration, it might help to draw beyond the borders. Even though we don't see those parts of the camels or the extended landscape, the fact that you had them in mind will make you picture more informed.
About the compositions, I wonder if you could try moving the camera around, especially in the "older" one, see if it looks more interesting? I think the idea is perfectly fine (I'm this tall against the camel, now I'm this tall against the camel). Even though this girl grows up to be powerful and take-charge, the "older" version seems kind of delicate. Maybe it's just me. I think having others will also help add more context, because if I didn't know about your character, I might think that she's a camel rancher, or camel whisperer, or something.
I remember during your critique we talked about showing the face more; even though she has a veil on her face, the use of light could be really good here.
Uh...yeah, if you didn't understand any of that, feel free to ask questions. Also feel free to disregard any of the things I said, aside from the camel reference thing.
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It's a good use of environmental context to show the passage of time, but I think you need to look at more reference for the camels sitting postures (I am correct in saying that they are camels?). To help with that, try sketching more images of camels, kind of like how you practice figure drawing, except looking at photos instead of actual camels. (Or if you can get a camel, do.) And when you do a pencil sketch for the finalized illustration, it might help to draw beyond the borders. Even though we don't see those parts of the camels or the extended landscape, the fact that you had them in mind will make you picture more informed.
About the compositions, I wonder if you could try moving the camera around, especially in the "older" one, see if it looks more interesting? I think the idea is perfectly fine (I'm this tall against the camel, now I'm this tall against the camel). Even though this girl grows up to be powerful and take-charge, the "older" version seems kind of delicate. Maybe it's just me. I think having others will also help add more context, because if I didn't know about your character, I might think that she's a camel rancher, or camel whisperer, or something.
I remember during your critique we talked about showing the face more; even though she has a veil on her face, the use of light could be really good here.
Uh...yeah, if you didn't understand any of that, feel free to ask questions. Also feel free to disregard any of the things I said, aside from the camel reference thing.
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